On the edge of my sanity here not understanding the voice in my ear it whispers things I don't want to hear The syllables like tendrils curl their fingers around my thoughts like a disease with a cure that can't be bought I hear all of my inner fears and faults all of my imperfections cloud my mind Now this negative vibe spreads slow through my veins like poison it's coldness freezes me where I am "I loathe all my ugly features and quirks how can any one stand to be around me?" This voice in my ear seems to be satisfied after this last line was inserted in my brain my will fights a losing battle against negativity
My sanity is at stake I can't fight a monster with no fear or weakness
So long as it flows and makes its reader ponder and reflect, that's all that counts. And I must say, it definitely did that.
Great poem.
My favorite line: "like a disease with a cure that can't be bought"
Very powerful imagery.