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On the edge of my sanity here
not understanding the voice in my ear
it whispers things I don't want to hear
The syllables like tendrils
curl their fingers around my thoughts
like a disease with a cure that can't be bought
I hear all of my inner fears and faults
all of my imperfections cloud my mind
Now this negative vibe spreads slow
through my veins like poison
it's coldness freezes me where I am
"I loathe all my ugly features and quirks
how can any one stand to be around me?"
This voice in my ear seems to be satisfied
after this last line was inserted in my brain
my will fights a losing battle against negativity

My sanity is at stake
I can't fight a monster
with no fear or weakness

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not much of a rhymer but I tried :T
Feeling down D:

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:iconyohkai:
*yohkai Jun 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
A poem doesn't need to rhyme silly. ;P

So long as it flows and makes its reader ponder and reflect, that's all that counts. And I must say, it definitely did that.
Great poem. :)

My favorite line: "like a disease with a cure that can't be bought"
Very powerful imagery. :D
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~didyousayNINJA Jun 12, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks you and I'm glad it made you ponder and reflect. :D
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